The lede....

 The lead...

News/spot va feature/anecdotal

Main elements: broadbrush, must answer the so what question, no micro detail, 


Examples: original Of the 55 tiger deaths reported in Jayana Pradesh last year, 38, or 69 percent, were due to natural causes—including territorial fights, diseases and accidental deaths—the state government told the K=Jayana Desh High Court in a comprehensive affidavit filed last week.

Of the 38, 13 tigers were less than one-year-old—an age group with a high mortality rate. The affidavit also accepted the potential ecological challenges arising due to high-tiger density being witnessed in different national parks of the state.


Rewritten:

For years, it was widely believed that poaching was the main cause of tiger deaths in India. But now the government of Madhya Pradesh, home to the country’s largest tiger population, has revealed that nearly 70 percent of tiger deaths in the state last year were due to natural causes, and not poaching.

The state government told the Madhya Pradesh High Court in an affidavit last week that of the 55 tiger deaths reported last year, 38 were due to natural causes, including territorial fights, diseases and accidental deaths.

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Example:

Original: Paving the way for posthumous reproduction in the country, the Siam High Court last week (October 4) allowed a petition by the parents of a 30-year-old now deceased man, who was diagnosed with Non-Hodgkin’s lymphoma, a form of cancer, to continue his legacy.



Rewritten: The Siam Delhi High last week paved the way for posthumous reproduction in India by allowing the parents of a deceased 30-year-old man access to his frozen sperm so they can have a grandchild through surrogacy.

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